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Question: Poem from the heart! I know that its long but please read the it in its entirety and give me advice 10pts PLS!?
I gave you my heart even though I was afraid
I told you how I felt and you said we were SECURE
In the beginning I thought WE had it made
But in the end I had a lot of feelings to ENDURE

I am writing this poem to let you know
I really DO care and I tried to let it show

You will not talk to me even though YOU were wrong
You act like I did something that made you feel pain
When I am the one that is sick and alone
Stuck with feelings of wanting to change

Wanting to change because I cant take no more pain
Wanting to change and just be the same

The same as those girls I told you I despise
The ones who cheat and steal and simply don’t care
The ones who will lie while you look them dead in the eye
Like the one that you left me for; I thought you cared…

I love you with all of my being
And didn’t realize how much until I caught you cheating

Cheating with someone still in high school
Cheating with someone who is still involved
I never thought you would be such a fool
I never thought you would make me feel unloved

I want you to know that I always wanted the best for you
And regardless of how you treated me; I STILL DO

I want you to know that I do understand
I shouldn’t have put my hands on you no matter what
I know I was wrong because youre a grown *** man
And I sincerely apologize but, at that particular time, I aint give ONE ****

Because you treated me like **** and I did nothing to US
But you still decided that you wanted to throw ME under the bus

You were wrong for that and I know you know
Because I saw it in your eyes the day we broke up
I had so many emotions and I TRIED not to let them show
But in the end I was still crying like a baby; JUST MY LUCK


I wanted to be strong and walk away from this
With my head held high and not like no *****

Unfortunately and Unwillingly I let you get the best of me

I never reacted with so much pain
I never reacted by calling you a name

However you still managed to utter that word
5 letters- *****; never have I been and you KNOW that’s absurd

I was nothing but GREAT to you; treated you like a KING
Because in my eyes you were, even without a ring

I told you I was sensitive so don’t play with my heart
But you still played me like a game of darts

I would have never done it to you; I would have opened my mouth
In the case that I felt our relationship was headed south

I tried to get you to tell me what was going on
But you still lied and cheated in my face; You know you wrong

Even your family told you I am the best for you
But you wanted the ***** who just like to be screwed

You acting so dumb; you know your cousin ****** her
As well as the hood they talk and don’t stutter

I wish you would have been open with me like I was with you
Instead, you took the cowards way out you did me wrong and you were very rude

Look at your face; Again, I say that was uncalled for
If you were just honest you would not have that sore

But I didn’t know what to do I was frustrated and miserable

Well I guess that’s it, but I have much more to say
But if I write anymore, again, you will ruin my day!



Just to let everyone know, I am not a poet but sometimes when I am very emotional words flow from my heart!. This poem is an example of this!
I do not worry about structure I did not even edit this poem I did not even read it until after it was posted!
I simply typed in word and copied and pasted!.!.!. These words came straight from the heart so please do not provide me with criticism on the actual poem (although it is appreciated) I just want to know what you thought when you read it and if you think that I should pass it to the intended person! My ex!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I don't think you should pass it on to the person who inspired it - I doubt you'd get the response you want and (speaking from my own painful experience) men tend to see things like this completely one dimensionally - in other words, he'll just see that he inspired you enough to write a poem about him!. This will be an ego trip for him!.

Plus, you say you don't want critique on the poem and that it came simply from your heart - it does however, seem that you've put a lot of effort into making it rhyme!. Poetry doesn't always have to rhyme to stir the emotions but I imagine writing it was pretty cathartic for you - if that's the case, keep at it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

as u have said its too long i am a patient of impatience and know very little about poetry except that what i write i simply COPY from MY MIND and i do not know how it just happens

i wish i could pl send it to ROBERTS HARRISON find him in poetry section he is an expert
hope this helps regards



ADVICE FOR WHATEVER BE ITS WORTH


When tears flow from the heart lovers seem to depart and say ur being emotional anyway!.
so if u know more about love u also know, those who cheat are repeaters to that extent you are lucky to have found it out!.
if i were u!. which i a m not, i would say this


ex======axe


and give him a kick
for once a guy knows that some one is lamenting and he cares a damn , coz he is not repenting ,it only gives born cheaters and re repeaters a thrill!. so if i were u, which i a m not, i would not give him an opportunity , to feel that i am a loser and he a winner!. repeaters and cheaters have at the end never really known what love is !. so if i were you, i would let bygones be bygone and pick up your bags and move on in life !. i would if i were u, which i am not, feel lucky that i found out what my ex was an a-one b@@@@@@ ,sorry, and would feel relieved from his pangs
you are an emotional budding poetess!.

please take this advice, for whatever be its worth, u r a poetess by birth!.

Good luck to you!. Good bye, u need not reply!.



two poems i wrote just now at some ones trquest hope u will enjoy reading them thanks any way

DESPAIR

Despair not dear Angel,birth is an agony,

Everyone has to fend for oneself in harmony!.

Surf not the seas,for tides of disaster,

Periodically ride at ease,for life's a search,

Away to fight the calamity hidden beneath,

In the depths of human heart and soul,

Remember making each one happy,should be our role!.


Come do not despair,
I've written it as,acrostic,
Do pass comments, but not as caustic,
As the one who wrote and assessed my last one,
A lenghty one at that did she snap,
she in despair,i think,called it crap!.
I cannot find what I wrote then,
As the same has got lost,in the Internet mayhem,
But I hope now that you will,
In despair read this one you,stll!.


LIBRA HAPPY BIRTHDAY

Libran's are from a world of a kind,
Of those who have a beautiful mind!.
They are very methodical and enchanting,
Their smile is very, very charming!.

Libras is a world to earn name and fame,
Their glances win hearts all the same,
Of those who reward them with a Rose,
My dear Libras are, to whom the universe,
The lovers' the classic winners,
Would all love to propose!.
My Dear!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

From!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

With a bunch of roses to you!.


BYE FOR NOW IF I CHANGE MY MIND I SHALL REVERT BACK TO YOUWww@QuestionHome@Com