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Question: Review my literary skills!? don't worry, they're short!.!?
Yeah, I know!.!.!.there's a lot of these!. But you know, you can never get too much feedbacks!. If it sucks, tell me!. Well, actually, don't!. I'm not really looking for "omg, it sucks!." or "wow, it's perfect!." Some constructive criticism would be nice!. Thank you :)
MUSIC
Base, bobs in time with my head
Beats with the rhythm of my
Heart!.
Harmony, flies with each strand of my hair
Sings to the pit of my
Soul!.
Words, spoken with my smiles, my frowns
translated through the windows that are my
Eyes!.
Music in;
My heart
My soul
My body
My being!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Poetry X has some really good articles on how to write a poem!. If I were to criticise your work, I would pull you up on your lack of use of simile and metaphor, but praise you for your use of an active tense!. A good poem has something to say about something and can change the way that you look at something forever!. The best teacher of poetry is time, so keep on writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
"base" is the wrong spelling!.!.!.it's "bass"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com