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Question: Rate my not so great poem 1-10!?
What a Beautiful World
A burst of liquid made way for pain
Rhythmic in its pattern
Father father she screamed
Of that day ever since its happening I have dreamed
She stood at the top of the stairs
Wailing and Pleading oh please don’t you dare
Never a man not to take a dare I accepted with a mischievous grin
Well with a plop against each stair as to the floor she rolled
But truth be told
I took from her her flower and replaced it with my seed
As a father of great standing in the community would you not have done the same
I think so indeed
And why not I ask you
Not mangled or gored just beaten and bruised along the newly laid floor she was strewn whimpering as if she had been abused
The abomination feet caught half out by appearance looked like a human to me not
Unless my old lady of some good 15 years hadn’t found the remnants in the garden she would be here today
Beg my pardon dear but you look painfully cold
Maybe my new lady will not be as you and all my ladies prior, bold, oh too bold
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I know we don't live in the times of ancient Salem with its witch hunts!.!.!.but this sounds like a Catholic Priest has raped someone!. It could very well be a father (parent), or a Father of another religion!. Why do I say this!? The beginnings, first of all!. Then, in the end!.!.!."you look painfully cold"!. --She is holding herself, shivering, distant stares as if delusional or detached, and in shock!. Horrific!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I would give it a 7 and a half!.
Although there's something about it that provokes curiosity and i don't know, i feel like i resonate with it quite a bit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it!. I can't really rate it because different poems are good for different reasons, but I really like the portrayal of pain and all the beautiful language!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This looks like a page from a novel, not a poem!.
For a poem it deserves a rating of 3!.125!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good!. I rate it as 9Www@QuestionHome@Com