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Question: When did you know you could make it!?
Choking on shame
spitting your words
this is not the way,
youth
pelted into function
until one day you see
the sun taste the morning
you hear old branches crack,
your eyes lock the clouds in place
cold sand wakes your feet
on a beach that smells like Sunday
morning
and waves that roar like trains
words tumble gently
into blue foam puddles
you stand down the distance
iron legs and pillared back
stomping the shoreline
you move the mystic hindrance
as youth
and victory
follow you home!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
When I discovered that THROUGH FRIENDS !.my legs could become iron and my back become pillared, allowing me to stomp as (maybe not youth, but!.!.!.!.) victory followed me home!.
For I am now home, on a friend's computer for just a moment, and discovered that just seeing your faces has given me strength!.
Beautiful pen, Buk, thanks for giving me strength!. Hugs, maWww@QuestionHome@Com
I love the poem- it puts new meaning to the phrase "making it"
When I had my children, i knew I had to make it and i ha dto make myself a better person for my kids to make it as well!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
The day after we brought our daughter home from the hospital, my man went fishing & while I was changing her diaper she shart all over me! I just sighed, cleaned us both up & then called her father & b*tched him out!!! Oh, the memories!!!!!! lol
I KNEW you had a soft side to you!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Filled with imagery, simile, metaphor, ideas and message!. My favorite: 'until one day you see/the sun taste the morning!.'Www@QuestionHome@Com
When I bought my first pack of bacon!.!.!. then I went out in the middle of the street and threw my hat in the air!.!.!. ? "You're going to make it after all!.!.!." ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Guess i missed it!.!.I escaped home when i was 19 and still trying to find my way!. I am sucked into a vaccum now no way to remember!.But greatful what i have is mine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This was "real" to me!. Loved "the sun taste the morning" line
as I taste my first coffee, I love watching the sunrise each morning!.!.will remember that line as i watch tomorrowWww@QuestionHome@Com
I always knew I could make it but I found out I could make it better when I had a choice of making it better or being doomed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thanks Buk!.!.!.Showing us a path!.!.!.
I knew I could make it, when I rode my son's bicycle 53 miles to get picked up after the levees broke in New Orleans!.!.!.!.!.Now I'm trying to figure what to make out of it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
See how the moods are dictated by the moody!? This is gooo!.!.!.I mean good!.!.!.the antithesis of the ugly one, filled with hope, freedom and tree sap!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds like morning out here down by the river!. I knew I could make it sober,somehow it didn't work otherwise!.A fine day it is today,thank you again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
home!.!.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!.is on that beach that smells like!.!.!.!.
Sunday morning!.!.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!.!.!.though!.!.!.
i haven't crossed the waters yet!.!.!.!.!.!.
simply because!.!.!.!.!. tomorrow never came!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I know now!.
This is beautiful!. You allow- No, you demand the reader to see, feel, hear and taste!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I only know on a daily basis - when I finally go to bed each night and realise I've managed to get through another day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Mellow stuff,moving in essence!.
I knew I could make it when I left my parents home,I finally felt I had a fighting chance!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very nicely done dear boy!. i just loved it!. Don't I just wish youth would follow me home!. Alas all I get is older!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is lovely, the softer side of you comes through, I like!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I've never been much of a wayward type!.
Yet dad's foot to my behindal zone at 18 surely helped!.
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Oh this is very nice!.
Hard not all cloyingly soft!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It amazes me that even when I think I can't make!.!.!.!.!.somehow, I still do!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very nice!. I liked it a lot!. Thank you!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I still don't knowWww@QuestionHome@Com
I can do better!. Wanna see!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I knew I could make it when I threw my hat really high into the air, then caught it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com