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Question: Please help me with my poem!!?
I wrote this poem and I need to know if there is anything I should change!. also, tell me if you understand it, because it may seem a little confusing!

Tick tock tick tock
It keeps ringing in my head
Somebody please stop the clock
Or else I cant go to be
Each day is getting longer
And I am becoming smaller
I cant satisfy this hunger
I'm just not getting any stronger
Where is the thrill in my life
If I could just hold on tight
I could maybe make it
If I didnt strive for it
The one thing worth it all
Just something amazing
The days come as they go
The days go as they come
Its the same old same old
Its time for a little fun
I dont wanna keep waiting
For something good to find me
Someone please help me
Cant you just see
Im trapped inside myself
Waiting for the sun to come out
Help me please
Please let me outWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
its fine 2 me!. Every poet has his/her own style !. Poetry is something you write for yourself!. I see no redundant lines, grammar errors, or lack of feelings!. It is simple and to the point, which is fine!. I can really relate as well, this works!. Bravo! You should join deviantart!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com

its a great poem but its a little !.!.!.idk dry add more detail and a little less rhymy words they dont all have to rhymeWww@QuestionHome@Com