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Question: I would like your creative insight :) here's another poem!?

a dragon bows inside its cave

bled upon the midnight blade

that pierces earths darkened day

shade upon a shadowed ray

of moonlight residue teary in grey

linked amid the poisoned bite

of heartless growth encounters the night

depressed between a missing valley

a lost confusion that tempts to drown me

weeping from a voiceless song

mute like death

a stubborn lull

oh, fall this silhouette of hope

this mocking bird screams just a joke

prisoner held up in the sky

why own any light in my eye

there is nothing to perceive, and the sun has died

your blurry glare fades off with time

leave away your useless light

let it be its way this blind

fake your day some other night

allow black be black and sever white

drop inside the oceans wide

and crown the darkest hole you find

buried beneath the lowest grind

maybe there you'll understand why

there is no fake no escape from crime
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is very deep!. The first few lines you think that it is getting very dark or the world is coming to an end!. The poisoned bite makes you think a vampire is lurking!. Then near the end it sounds as if you are referring to someone who is blind!. then at the very end buried beneath !.!.!.!. and no escape from crime brings you back to death or the Revelation!.

I guess all in all if you don't have Christ you walk as the blind and the deaf, for some have eyes and see not and some have ears and hear not!. The wages of sin is death!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good imagery, the pace and rhythm was a little repetitive!. Try breaking it up into sections and vary the rhythm of your lines!. I was a little bothered by the “almost rhyming” thing you've got going on there!. the ambiguity of which lines rhyme and which didn't made it seem to wander!. Other than that it was good!. Www@QuestionHome@Com