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Question: We were sitting alone in a room!. a barely knew him!.!.!.!?
Your head is lost inside a creation
An inspiration that sang to you
But the strings and fingers on your guitar
Have not a clue what world bends through
The music breaths and lives its first beat
Its birth delivered a cry so sweet
I hold my breath
embraced in your song
And let every thing around you pause
There’s nothing here that is around us
I only see your story
You close your eyes and sway with this
Like nothing is of worry
How simple it is to know, how simple
It calls forth a longing
How sentimental it shows, how gentle
You are who my souls been wondering
You lay it out like an open dairy
And give your sadness hope
How beautiful it is, is this inquiring
That you have let be woke
Not a word will pass between us
Maybe a once shy smile
But there is nothing I’d rather tell you
Then please don’t stop for a whileWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Pretty poem!.!.!.here are some editing suggestions: "breathes", not "breaths" in line 5, "everything", not "every thing" in line 9, "soul's" not "souls" in line 17, and "than", not "then" in the last line!. "that you have let be woke" is an awkward line!.!.!.consider revising it!.

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