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Eorica, Eorica, Eorica
Beethoven Third Symphony
Eorica, Eorica, Eorica
Beethoven has master piece
He starts the symphony
With the orchestra in full display
Loud with majestic power
We are overwhelmed
No place to go
We are exhausted
He relieves us now
With soft melody that follows
He has master command
The music comes quick in flurry
We are whipped with emotions
The music comes back again
In fresh successive succession
Like a boy coming hurriedly in the field
The tunes comes back
Haunting us in familiar rhythm
It is over and over again
Filling and feeding our soul
Some sound comes again
From far away
Like some one we knew
Calling us softly,
Gently and beautifully
Racing and touching our heart
The old familiar tune
Comes back and back again
Teasing us
With power
Hurriedly closing on us
The sound have died
Like funeral procession
Full of sadness
The same tune comes back
dressed in sadness
So sad
The old tune revives back
Crushing us
Dwelling in us again
Mercy
Is there hope!?
Happy tune finally appears
A relieve
The tune back again
In happy setting
It is getting louder
And majestic
A new tune
Taking us by surprise
The tune dominating all
We are taken to the wilderness in
Now where we go
We need guidance
The familiar tune comes back
Nibbling music
The music has died out
The faint tune in the back ground
Oh revived
a hurried tune
it comes back
all in force, strong
oh the main theme
bringing joy
the music instruments
bring announcement
talking to us
in language
we do not understand
then it is all beginning
same thing
all again
all again
to a loved tune
strange change of music
curious steps
like a sleuth
and echoing drum beats
as the end nears
very joyful music comes along
to wipe the stress
of past harsh suspense tunes
the music crashing
the trumpets are loud
the old tune comes teasing us
like flute in prairie
mysterious tune
like the awakening of the morning
So melodious and deep
Going fast like streaming river
And there is
The calmness of early morning
What we expect
Leaving us in expectation
The orchestra in full force
The repercussion instruments
In control
The French horn
Angry music comes in warning
A new tune born tune
Part 2
Sad melody
Music comes like small wavelets in the ocean
The old tempo
Comes back in hurry and energetic
Like walking in the woods
Eorica, Eorica, Eorica
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow, it's been a while since I've read a long poem!. This one took me by surprise!. Not in a bad way!.

It's as if you told the story of the song in other words, taking the reader through each tidbit of the song!.

I am not familiar with the song, but I almost could hear it in my head by reading this!.

I love the use of unexpected grouping of words such as "The music comes quick in flurry" and "curious steps" and even "To wipe the stress"!.

Be careful not to repeat words in a long poem, unless it was intentional!. (example: "Loud with majestic power" and "And majestic"!.)
Sometimes it draws the reader back to the original line, making them second guess what they read in the first place!.

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It's a bit long & goes back and forth!. But I'd like to read it while listening to the symphony itself, then it would probably make sense!. In fact, it was an idea I had many yrs ago, to 'package' different sensory stimuli together!. You could be onto something!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Title is spelled wrong!. You might want to check the spelling of the subject matter of your poem!.

It's long and reads like an outline of the symphony!.
Some nice phrases "mysterious tune like the awakening of the morning'Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well Done , wow and alot of Suspense in this!. Very Creative !.Www@QuestionHome@Com