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Question: I posted this earlier but only one person read!. looky!?
i never let people read my things, they are very personal!.!. but this is only yahoo answers and none of you know me!.


where did you go
when you left me all alone!?
the weeks turned to months
my fingers bleed, my heart turned cold
i lost all warmth
i cracked my neck
as i waited for the train
only to realize when you arrived
you weren't the same
why is it that i open to those furthest away
close up to those the closest,
only to feel ashamed
cold cold hearts always beat alone
my cold cold heart will always beat aloneWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You need to change the wording of the last few lines!.!.!. after " why is it that I open to those furthest away"!.
I think you have a greater array of words that can be used to express your feelings about sharing who you are,,,,,
Why is it that I open to those furthest away,
retreat from those I love
I feel such shame inside
I know I stand apart!.
As my cold heart beats, alone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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