A different style again.. I am testing..will you please comment?

Question: A different style again!.!. I am testing!.!.will you please comment!?

Hunger pangs
I need nourishment
I need comfortable shelter
Water to satiate my Thirst
Oxygen filling my lungs to capacity
I need mysticism with no criticism
I need warmth of friendship
Something to believe in
Tangible and
My hunger
Drives me on
To find better things
Explicitly graphic days lie ahead
A soft yielding cushion of harmony
Dreams of hope melodic and pleasing
Radiant sunsets flushed and glossed
Oceans of audacious pleasures
Provisions for sustenance
Hunger abated
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maddamselfly,,, I believe you are speaking about the progressing and regressing word count and not so much the poetic content!.

personally, I like poems that are intelligently written AND involve a shape with the right hand side such as ski sloped, valleys, or twin peaks as you have here,,,

shapes of horizontal flames is what I was striving for in my poem "When sanity flees, we rush in" though I was unable to get the story in place with a progressive word or syllable count!.

You on the other hand have done this very well and deserve a round of applause for the structure AND content!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is different yes I like it I love the metaphors you have used!

My favorite part of this is this
To find better things
Explicitly graphic days lie ahead
A soft yielding cushion of harmony
Dreams of hope melodic and pleasing
Radiant sunsets flushed and glossed
Oceans of audacious pleasures
Provisions for sustenance
Hunger abated

The more you wrote here the better it got and loved the last line it finished this piece nicely!
Cheers!
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Well , Poetry Means to Share Your Own Thought With You In Your Own Words But In a Lil Different Style!.

And When you Do Share Your Own Thoughts With Yourself!. Then No One Else Can Be a Batter Judge Than You!.

and if You Ask Me!. Every Thought Is Wonderful!. and poetry is a Name of sharing Your Thoughts and Your Feelings and emotions Towards That Particular thought!.

So every Poem Is Wonderful In Its Own way!. Same Goes For Your Poem !. Hunger of Your Soul and How To Relief Yourself!. Wonderful!. Keep It Up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The right to think so and do so is naturally granted!. Some give up this right, but you are persistent to preserve it!.!. Congrats ! I 'm hungry too for all those elements in your poem, for they consist our dreams, hopes, and ambitions!. If I ever give up on them, then I'm gonna be ( a walking) dead, and I like to be ( a walking) alive person!. Good job, girl!Www@QuestionHome@Com

so when you say you are testing, does that mean i translate it to make sense to lower standards readers, or that i commenton its judgement!? i honestly don't know if you get the credit of writing or if you are taking a test about this poem!.

its neat though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have not been around long enough to know your style well enough to comment in that way!.
I see your needs and drive and resolution, and I like the way you put these thoughts together!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it!

I love the style, the use of educated words, the shape, lack of rhyme (which) I think would ruin it!.

Favorite line:
I need mysticism with no criticism

Now that is perfect!
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too many adjectives, verbs!. maybe i'm wrong!. but, i think you have the need to write!. good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well said, your thoughts were easily transmitted to me!.!.!. lots of emotional statements!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like the way you've formed it !.!.advanced wording!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like smart words used smartly!.!.!.!.That's what I saw!.!.!.
But what will Bob see!?!?!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its not worth publishing!.!.!.good 4 here though!.!.!.keep writing thoWww@QuestionHome@Com

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