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watching my own death

no one knows how a feel
how i see things through my eyes
blood and gore
are my sickest demise

watching the death
the killing
of innocent people
the blood spilling

waiting for the image to stop
the video replaying in my head
and for the sun to come up
and make me feel safe in my own damn bed

i am not what you'd call normal
or sanest of all girls
being covered in blood and memories
instead of diomonds and pearls

the death that has happened
brought no tears
and will be fixed up
with just a few beers

watching my own death
many times
and how i died
for just a few nickles and dimes

prostitution
did not make me known
no family
or a place to call "home"

please help yourself
cus it wont give glee
to get the last toy on the shelf
which sadly is me

i wrote this because i know im kinda slutty
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i dont feel like thisWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You have a few lines that are inspired!.!.!.such as, "watching my own death, many times, and how I died, for just a few nickles and dimes"!. Watch your spelling, please use the upper case "I", not "i"!.

About the subject itself and how you feel about yourself (the being a little slutty part)!.!.!.you can be anything you want starting right now!. That's not just "words", it's fact!. The difference someone who is slutty and someone who is not is control!.!.!.everyone wants to be slutty, but some decide that since they can say yes, they can also say 'no', and that saying yes never made them more popular, just more slutty!.!.!.so they said "no" instead!. You can be as loose or as recluse as you want, and if you want others to respect you more, you need to start respecting yourself more, which means being the person you want to be rather than the person you perceive yourself to be!. You probably already know this, but I'd rather say it and have you say, "I know", than not say it and be sorry I didn't!. I have three kids!.!.!.one of them is lost and has to find her own way back!.!.!.I just hope you don't go down the same road!.!.!.because it's a slippery slope and you're in the gutter before you realize it, usually feeling like there's no way out!. Everyone stumbles, but the strong pick themselves back up and move away from the edge!.

!.!.!.in the meantime, keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry about my last post, i shouldn't have said that!.
Anyways, this is a good poem even though it's sad and a little depressing!. But being "slutty" can easily be stopped, so if you start to build more self-respect then it shouldn't be hard!.Www@QuestionHome@Com