Please rate my poem i wrote in a few min. ?

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Question:

i made this poem [only 4 lines then rest now] when i was half awake and sleep last night!. remembered so it's here!. sometimes bad things happen!.

"A Prayer"

Take me away!.

Help me find a way out!.

Rescue me from this live decay!.

Unfold the darkness of my heart;

Cold chains, Death is dragging me to my last hour!.

I pray with my eyes open in fear!.

Eyes red; Body beaten; Bones fractured!.

Razor blades I trace back to a disfigured body!.

Take me away!.

Be my route to escape!.

A guiding Light in secret,

Carry me away from my yesterdays, todays, and tomorrows,

So I may rest in peace!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

That which is remembered from the half-awake state and then hurriedly written down is not called a "poem", it is called a "First Draft" and, as such, is generally not shared with anyone!. Live with this a while and its defects will become obvious!. That is why we revise!. And yes, sometimes bad things happen!. I hope you have someone you can talk with about it!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com