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Question: All those with opinions!.!. critique this one!.!. please!?
Long soft and deeply
You look at me
Face lights up
Lips curve
Smile
Eyes bright
What a sight
You hypnotize
Is this a surprise!?

(We are using syllables not words 543212345 and yes I do have a muse in my pocket)
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Looks like that muse is OUT of your pocket! Very! interesting, new, formatting in poetics!
Creativity is your name!.!.!.just keep it going!.!.!.make this a challenge!! of a new form!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good but the last line, might I add!.
in continuation!?

and I will arise,
as a nymph that flies,
to your dark green eyes,
to be your surprise!.




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Interesting, I like it without the last line, seems more mysterious, I
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I think it is very beautiful!. It is spare with words, not over flowery but conveys everything I think it is meant to!. Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A poet is a master of words!. I feel you could have done more if you were not restricted by that 543212345 syllable form!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Way to go,,, very fine bit of verse and I do like the format,,, do whatever it takes to hold onto that museWww@QuestionHome@Com

Loved it, loved it, loved it!
Good on you!

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Hide the HP sauce!.!.!.!.the muse is backWww@QuestionHome@Com

Ya did good on this one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm just pleased to read you!Www@QuestionHome@Com