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Question: One more piece before I rest, would you like to comment!?
Skipping stones across water’s surface
Dipping feet ‘Neath waters veneer
Chewing on a daisy stem
Picking off its petals
Day dreams
Occupy intellect
Thoughts skip off the track
Ideas float
Like so many clouds
Changing shapes and color
Sun shining through
Creates a warmth
I close my eyes
And feel the hands
Of Nature
Taking me over
On a warm grassy spot
Beside the pool
That formed beneath waters falling
Gently titillating the senses
Inhibitions abandoned
I am alive!
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Pardon moi but I find it to be a beautifully written piece that stems from a thought seeded by an emotion!.!.!. OM freaking G that's what Robert Frost called poetry!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Snobbish opinions of poetry do abound,
looks like you attracted one of them this go-round!.
Laughter, light heartedness, silly, all worth while,
sweep, then flush, snobbish stances into a pile!.

Personally, I enjoyed what you penned maddam!.
the imagery is more than adequate and I really fell for the lines;

"Gently titillating the senses
Inhibitions abandoned
I am alive!"

'nuff said !


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Below find the original and cleverly written response some a** clown posted on another piece offered politely from a human soul!.!.!.
Oh, wait!.!.!.that's what I see here


"I don't get why people do this - they write some prose (continuous writing), split every sentence up into two or three lines, then call it poetry!. This isn't I REPEAT ISN'T POETRY!. An example of what you have done is!.!.!.

I don't get why people
Do this they
Write some prose
Continuous writing
Split every sentence
Up into two or three lines,
Then call it poetry;
This isn't, I repeat isn't
Poetry; An example of what
You have done is this!.!.!.

you get the picture!

* 16 minutes ago

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Shakespeare writes crap like this as well, calling it verse but it's not"


Madam!.!.!.!. Your words need not be confirmed by mine!.!.!.!.they stand on their own!.!.!.!.!.!.Pardon my diatribeWww@QuestionHome@Com

My dear, I respectfully disagree with the first answerer!.!.!.
you ARE alive, your words made ME feel alive,
full of imagery, you transported me to your place of being!.!.!.
my friend, if that ain't poetry, then I'm gettin' out of this place!

maWww@QuestionHome@Com

It is a beautiful poem!.


You should post it to www!.talenttrove!.com!. The talenttrove community is known for giving a lot of great constructive feedback!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

There are some people who see words
and understand nothing else
then there are those that see the same
and know the beauty of which they speak!.

Thanks for the beauty!. I was daydreaming with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I enjoy climbing into this style poetry!. Like your verb choices!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't get why people do this - they write some prose (continuous writing), split every sentence up into two or three lines, then call it poetry!. This isn't I REPEAT ISN'T POETRY!. An example of what you have done is!.!.!.

I don't get why people
Do this they
Write some prose
Continuous writing
Split every sentence
Up into two or three lines,
Then call it poetry;
This isn't, I repeat isn't
Poetry; An example of what
You have done is this!.!.!.

you get the picture!Www@QuestionHome@Com