Please tell me what you think of this. easy 10 points?

Question: Please tell me what you think of this!. easy 10 points!?

Times have changed, lives are made
everything is boring, nothing to say,
motion sickness nothings a thrill,
times of pain, sounds of music,
earthly mess and sculptured greatness!.
points of view, culture club
everything seems to be un stuck
slight of hand open shoelace
open eyed but no place
swollen thoughts where eyes close down,
cant but help to make a sound
body shock, empty shell
inside fright, welcome to hell

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Sounds to me like a metaphor for either dissatisfaction OR self-gratification!.

Or both!

Because self-gratification can be intensely dissatisfying!. Conversely, some people like to wallow in self pity thus finding a perverse gratification in dissatisfaction!.

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I don't quite understand the meaning of the poem: were you attempting to communicate the hectic pace of everyday life!? That's kind of the gist I was getting!.

It seemed slightly random to me - although I'm a fan of the abstract poetry!. Work on the grammar, too!. ^^

It is quite a nice poem though!. Keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your first 6 lines don't rhyme!. It doesn't flow very smoothly!. And it sounds depressing!. Although there are lots of sad poems!.
But it is interesting!. I just can't make out what you are getting at!.
Keep it up!. Practice makes almost anything perfect!.
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yeah that is very random
being random is good to
but you do need to get it in a flow
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There are medications for such as this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very randomWww@QuestionHome@Com

Doesn't make sense in a way!. Put more meaning to this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com