I am suppose to write a narrative poem and it has to narrate a sequence of events and communicate their significance!. here is what i've done, any tips or opinions will be of great use!. i'm in 10th grade if that makes a difference of any kind!. thanks for all the help! :)
I knew her for just one short, depressing decade!. My mother’s life
Slipped away like a wet wine glass, sliding down my fingers
And shattering as it hits the floor!. I’m moving to my cousin’s house
In glorious Germany; since My father, like a mettlesome mouse,
Knows I’ll be better off without him!. I sluggishly sip away ten more years from my poison that is time before another part of my heart turns night-black, dies, and sheds more tears!. My father is dead!. I’ve drunk 15 more years from my cup of vicious, venemous Time and the devil has crept through the hell hole that I call home!.
Synagogues are burning to the ground!. Ashes wrap around the air
Like a snake suffocating an animal as they fly into my eyes!. The ashes
Pierce through my eyes, like a bestial blade piercing into one’s chest,
Brutally burning my eyes and the sizzling of my hope begins
To sizzle worse than ever!. All around me everything is being taken over
And I have no escape!. Death encompasses me like heat encompasses
The scarlet scorching sun!. My business is gone along with all my
Possessions!. I sold them for the last couples gasps for breath left in my
Diminishing tank of oxygen!. As I hoped to refill my chances for survival
And invest everything into the chance of escape to Chile I soon found out
That the opportunity was gone!. After my money was sadistically stolen I am left
Without anything!. My wife and son are all that I currently own!.
Everything Protecting me from the morbidly, malicious supercilious stones
Of death is slowly vanishing!. Like a person stranded on a desert approaching
A mirage, my chances for survival are beginning to fade!.
A pitiful police officer has Robbed me of my only aid, my family!.
I followed my pathetic path to a concentration camp, being ignorant of the inevitable Years of tormenting torture that were ahead!. After being in a camp I soon found out
The outcome of my wife and children!. Their luck like a person with a somber slipknot Around their neck had slipped and was beginning to slowly suffocate!. Their life and luck, Slowly evaporating and being choked out!. They suffocated in a gas chamber!.
The disgusting dictator running the place has asked for a shoe maker!. I along with many Others have taken this easier job!. One day, because I was literate I moved up to taking Orders from customers!. Day after day, my job remained constant with my only reward Being the sad, scarce soup!. One day I was transported to a new facility!. We were aboard
A train passing through Czechoslovakia when many heard and witnessed a glimpse of Freedom!. Like a child running for freedom in a pleasant playground we all ran!. I was shot In the ankle, but managed to make it to the heavenly house of a gravedigger!. This man And his wife saved me from the cold, burning hands of torture that were slowly raping My life and heart away!. One day a Nazi soldier was searching for me like a greyhound Searching for a prisoner, but I hid from the suffering and death!. I was alive and free!.
Soon after, death lashed out at me one last time!. Having been held captive for several Days, I finally awoke from my despicable taste of death!. Soon after, the war was over
And I returned to Poland!. I returned to find all my love and happiness that was once there Had deteriorated and I was now all alone, a single soul in my gloomy, godforsaken world!.
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