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Question: What waits down in the valley!?

Valley of Love

Silence waits for one to say
Sweet words drop on me
Sticking in my heart
As bonds mate
Eyes lock
Love
Tips touch
Lips red wanting
Soft arms holding on
Two aglow as lights dim
Bare skins melt in the moment

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nicely constructed



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Gentle personal moment, delicious!. K-udos!.
I took a passage once and,

Be still and know that I am God
Be still and know that I am
Be still and know that I
Be still and know that
Be still and know
Be still and
Be still
Be
Be still
Be still and
Be still and know
Be still and know that
Be still and know that I
Be still and know that I am
Be still and know that I am God

My mind saw a "K" for King!.
I had been given the top part,
I added the bottom!.
I didn't know at the time
this was a form, until Eva
wrote a poem in this form!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the brevity of such pieces!. This was very succinct!. I couldn't help but wonder if it would sound better in the past tense though: "My silence waits for one to say---Sweet words dropped on me!." I just loved this, especially the end: "Bare skins melt in the moment!." This is the best ending I've read so far to such a love poem!.


Ahh, I just noticed the shape!. Good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wonderful when this happens!. I don't like the word drop!. It is such a soft poem and that word is !.!.!?!? I dunno, I think another word could work its way into the gentleness you have going on here!. And sticking!.

I does have the look of a valley!.
More love HydroWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is so sensual, visually carnal, and very romantic!. I love the way the form echoes the title, also very visual and physical!. Wonderful!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

a K-poem in the Valley

if you could do it in the G format, it wouldn't be better!.
it works also in K, it's the same thing - is it!? :) (:Www@QuestionHome@Com

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VOLCANO !?
i dont know why i said that when its about love
but it sounds like your talking about a volcano to me
hahaha



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Good job as usual, hydro!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.veddy veddy nicely done!.!. I like it
I shall have to try it!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com