SMILES
Smiles on faces
In different places
Tenderness seen or
one that's mean
One that hides
behind the disguise of
of debauchery of guise
A smile of surprise
is seen in the eyes!
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Smiles on faces In different places Tenderness seen or one that's mean One that hides behind the disguise of of debauchery of guise A smile of surprise is seen in the eyes! Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: MB,,, I do believe you are onto something here ( as opposed to being on something ) If I may make a suggestion !? To keep the rhyming consistent, I would consider changing L 6 from "behind the disguise of " to behind (a) disguise!. Perhaps that is just a typo since "of" is also repeated in L 7!. I'll say it again,,, more of your poems please ( think of that sing song voice from the Ovaltine commercial )Www@QuestionHome@Com Maltese Breeder, you always make me smile with your poems!. It is a pleasure to read them!. One look says it all By Jellz Fisher Perfect tender little brilliant Mona different individual crazy enigmatic happy crooked silly loving knowing open In every smile, in every style, Every little way you look, blows me away!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it, you should make it a song and have that be the opening verse!. Www@QuestionHome@Com this is the beginning of more smiles to come for sure!. and eyes are the other half of the smile!. nice going Ms B!Www@QuestionHome@Com put down the jack daniels my friendWww@QuestionHome@Com I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com it's very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com good =]Www@QuestionHome@Com wow! thats one of the poems that i actually get!. good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com Hahah, I loved it :) Keep it up!. Www@QuestionHome@Com i like it! we want more!Www@QuestionHome@Com |