Kind of a dark poem, What do you think?

Question: Kind of a dark poem, What do you think!?

I can't believe I'm here again!.
Back to that feeling!.
That's oh so familiar!.
I wish it would go away!.
I try to control it!.
Recognize it when I can!.
Hoping for it to stop!.
But nothing works!.
That feeling of lose!.
That I'm losing control!.
Like everything is falling!.
Even me!.
Things get better!.
Yea, than always worse!.
I can't take it anymore!.
I'm going crazy!.
Just shut up Jalana!
Things will be fine!.
Stop thinking this way!.
None of this is true!.
What lies I tell myself!.
Why can't things ever work out!?
I must be forgotten!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Sounds like you are struggling with something at this point!. Am I right!?
Sounds like you need to start listening to your heart and realizing the truth about yourself!. Sometimes the mind is not always correct because sometimes our thoughts are distorted even though we don't believe it!. That's when you have to listen to that inner voice!. Your heart!. Your soul!.

It's very beautiful Jalana!. I really like it!. I write dark poems as well!. Darker than this even!. Keep going on writing poems!. You do very well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you want to express these feelings, try to do so in a more interesting
way!. The way it's presented is no different than if you'd written these
things in a diary!. Use your imagination to conjur up words that evoke
imagry, sight, sound, smell or sense of place, whether emotional
or geographical!. Condense, condense, condense!.!.until you're left
with just a backbone of words that all have weight unto themselves!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think poetry is a good way of expressing yourself!. Try using assonance, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhythm, symbolism, irony, metaphor and simile to make your poetry better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats pretty good acctually!.

read mine http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It doesn't really have a poetic stream of consciousness!. What's with all the periods!? Poems are split up into lines and stanzas but they usually make sense grammatically!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A little dark but I like it!. Trust it is not autobiographical although we all have those moments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is really original!. good workWww@QuestionHome@Com

GREAT POEM! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!?
Little dark but nice ring to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Err!.!.!. I guess I've seen worse!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its strange but I kinda like it So does that make me strange too!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

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wow! i like it, im kind of going through a depressed moment right now and i can really relate to it!.!.
great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really like it though!.

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i give it an 8Www@QuestionHome@Com

fuckin great!.!.!. read mine and comment will ya here:

Wish

You walk over to the counter

You hear music

It sounds like a grand orchestra

You can't help but look for revenge

You want to punish them

You want them to be miserable

You pick up the cold blade

The music gets louder

You see your reflection

You smile at the thought of ending it all

The blade glides over you bare flesh

It sends shivers of excitement up your spine

You push firmly

Violins explode with sound as the skin breaks

A smooth crimson substance flows out

Blood…

You smile at the pain

You feel warm inside

Death is coming quickly

You write a note

Saying how much you were hated

You were an outcast

No matter what you did

It was never enough

You were never enough

…

You wake up

It was a dream

…

…

But you wish wasn't

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