Poem: and can my heartbeats evade?

Question: Poem: and can my heartbeats evade!?

There's a monster inside of me
Whose heart beats shadows mine
And nightmares seeps his thoughts
Possible and sublime

And can my heartbeats evade
Cravings for this dark dish
That tugs the strings of my heart
With logic thats hard to resist

And I endulge these fantasies
These tainted thoughts of mine
To relieve the hell which abides
In the darkness of my mind
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wow!. i like this a lot ;]
you are very talentedWww@QuestionHome@Com

Excellent and emotional!. I like it !.Good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

there's a sad angel inside of you!
we are human and human can never be monster!.
I like your poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's not poetry; it's not even decent English!.
You need to try a lot harder!Www@QuestionHome@Com

very strong phrases, a pleasure to read!.!.!.please, lets hear more!Www@QuestionHome@Com