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Question: Is this a good song/poem!? i am 12!?
Situation: I am very pissed right now, and i need to let me emotions go, so this song is about a friend and i!. she chose me over a guy!.!.

Song title: Disapointed!.
My heart is locked up, it's locked up in a cage!. A cage made up of double security gates!.
Until I met you, I thought how alike we were, never thinking what would most likley occur!.
We had so much in common, tell me what is the problem!? You can't tell me the truth!? If you can't then I'm through!? How could you replace me with who!? I don't think I have met the new, you!.!.!.!.

And I am not happy, i am not sad, i am not glad, i am not bad!. with all these emotions i sit hear and cry, i am more then all of those all kept up inside!.!.!.!.i am!.!.disapointed!.!.!.

I feel like I am here everyday, when everyday is the same talk of his "so pretty face"
and i am done let's talk about something else!. please be your self!. it hurts to say the least, how could a best friend just lie to me!?
how could it be!? oh he!.!.!.!?

And I am not lonley, i am not phoney, i am not furious, i am not curious!. with all these emotions i sit hear and why, i am more then all of those all kept up inside!.!.!.!.i am!.!.disapointed!.!.!.

bridge!.
i feel you think i am upset, but why should i be, when i am suppose to be disapointed!. you don't get all i do, i guess it was always a joke to you!. i don't ever think you got it, how much you meant to me!. and now you are running around the place trying to find where i will be!. every day is the same old ****!. and it's dispointment i can give!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
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< WOW !!! >

I’m speechless… LoL

I’m into poems myself but I’ve never read [red] any poem(s) as Completely Contemporary as yours!.

And hun, there’s a lot of originality in there!.

It is very well written; and very well contemporarily rhymed


Love—it !
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lol cute!.Www@QuestionHome@Com