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Question: PLEASE HELP!!!!!l! poem!?
i have to make a poem for english class using certain words!. can you tell me if you like htis poem!? also make any changes if you think it needs it!.
thanks SOOOO much :)

The ocean crashes onto the sand,
The breeze blows through the air,
The rain pours down from the cloudy sky,
Life goes on without a care!.

The rooftop stomps with great anger,
The thunder roars with no intention of stopping!.
The sky is only getting greyer,
Water pours down, as if buckets were dropping!.


And even though it's a rainy day,
know that the sky will clear,
it might be a stormy day today,
but remember it can't rain forever!.

thanks so much again,
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It would help If we knew what words you had to have,
there are some meter changes that could tighten it up

You could do something like

The ocean crashes onto the sand,
The breeze rustles the trees,
The rain pours down from the cloudy sky,
As life flies by with ease!.

last verse
And even though it's a rainy day
know that the sky will clear
For beyond each storm that comes your way
A rainbow will appear

just a few thoughts to perhaps stir your own creativity!.!.!.you got a good thing going hereWww@QuestionHome@Com


The ocean crashes onto the sand,
The breeze blows through the air,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.yeah well where else
The rain pours down from the cloudy sky,
Life goes on without a care!. !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. umm!.!.!.

The rooftop stomps with great anger,
The thunder roars with no intention of stopping!.
The sky is only getting greyer,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.greyer is not a word
Water pours down, as if buckets were dropping!. !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.why would buckets drop


And even though it's a rainy day,
know that the sky will clear,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.u mean I know!.!.
it might be a stormy day today,
but remember it can't rain forever!.

okay!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Aww, its a cute poem! And nah, dont change it!. Its fine just the way it is!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really Like it!!!
-Ambi818Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the way it is dont change it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its sweet don't change it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is the most awesome poem ever! dont change it its cool!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it alot!Www@QuestionHome@Com