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Position:Home>Poetry> What more can be said about the changing seasons?Question: What more can be said about the changing seasons!? Inspired by Elaine's Autumn poem!.
Seasons happen naturally by Jellz Fisher 080916 Ground leaves lie deathly dry!. Windblown reminders trees age more gracefully in truth and beauty than the rest of humanity!. Replaced soon enough green buds sprouting , responding to light, morphing into new shapes of life, pulsing with sap, signifying start of terminal life, ending up!.!.!.!.!. as ground leaves!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I love the damp!.earth-rich smell of the woods in Autumn, the way the trees along the river burst into a cacophony of reds, yellows, greens and golds, before disrobing and going to sleep for the winter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This is just lovely!. You have described the cyclical nature of Nature in a poem whose structure mimics its content, beginning where it ends and ending where it begins!. We can only do justice to it by reading it again, and again, and savoring the beauty, the inexorable beauty, of your poem and what it so remarkably describes!. Dear, that one's a keeper, as we used to say!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The complete cycle expressed very well in 14 lines!. The only line that had a twisted ring to it, ( deviated from the smooth flow was ) L 6,,, " than the rest of humanity!." just seems a bit awkward even though I felt I knew what you were saying!. ( maybe,,, than most of humanity ) All in all, nicely penned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com than the rest of humanity!.!.!.!.!.than does humanity!? (cos trees aren't part of humanity) It still sounds horribly brutal! As soon as the poor things sprout, you say they are at the beginning of the end!.!.!.give the poor things a chance pulsing with sap, lapping up the warmth of the sun, drinking the sweet brief summer rain,!.!.!.!.then you can start their terminal life!.!.!.for god's sake!. =) Only joshing, y'understand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Pleasant image; I'll try to remember that when I'm raking the yard!. (This is not empty praise!.) This is what I feel is good poetry!. The inner slant rhymes and assonance and line structure all were right on in my opinion!. Well done!. Edit: Yes, I know; I have enemies now!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Leaves cascading down like dead skin cells flaking and falling A difference though!.!.!. trees have rings, internal, to mark their years we have those wrinkles, external, to mark ours! Nicely said!. Www@QuestionHome@Com The beginning of the end "start of terminal life" an excellent image!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Jellz I liked reading this and feel you did a great job with description and really felt the change of the season with this piece, Nicely done thanks! Cheers!Www@QuestionHome@Com Nice one Jellz! I'm enjoying reading all of the Autumn poems these days, including yours! Haven't gotten around to writing one!.!.!.I'm in a little slump!Www@QuestionHome@Com beautiful images, I miss Northern Autumn!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I am loving these fall poems! well done jellz! thank you!Www@QuestionHome@Com I was doing real good until you called me a pulsing sap!.!.!.hehehehe!Www@QuestionHome@Com |