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Question: Will my teacher in my playwriting course think this skit is good!?
This Tuesday lunch was a very short one!. No one had much of an appetite!.

Tuesday Lunch With the “Girls” At the Old Folks Home (9/16/08)
Characters:

Elaine (Driver/Volunteer}
Louise (Ambulatory Resident
Virginia (Ambulatory Resident)

Setting: A table for three in the facility’s Dining Room

Elaine: (sitting down) Hi, ladies!. Kathy told me we weren’t going out today!.
Louise: I didn’t wanna go!.
Virginia: She doesn’t wanna go anyplace lately!.
E: How come!?
L: I just felt tired!.
E: Well, we all get tired!. I’m sorry I couldn’t come last week!.
L: You didn’t come last week!?
V: Remember, we had a storm, she couldn’t make it!.
L: I don’t remember…
V: You never remember anything any more!
E: Shall we eat!? What IS this anyway!?
V: Some kinda chicken, I think!.
L: I don’t wanna eat!. I’m going back to my room!.
V: What about Bingo!?
L: I’m not playing Bingo today!.
E: Wait just one minute!. I brought something I promised!.
V: Oh, it’s the kitty! Can we keep her!?
L: (taking the book, stroking the picture of the cat)
She’s so pretty!. Can I take her to my room!?
E!. Well, she’s for everyone!.
But take her, I’ll tell Kathy you got her first!.
V: (pointing) Is this a picture of that crazy guy
who thinks he lives on Mars!?
E: That’s him all right!.
V: He doesn’t LOOK crazy!.
E: All artists are a little crazy, Virginia!.
But he functions pretty well most of the time!.
V: You actually know him!?
E: Not exactly!. I’ve never met him, but…
L: Can you help me up!? I need a nap!.
E: Sure!. I’ll go with you!.
Wait for me, Virginia!. I’ll get back to you…
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Absolutely not!!!,,,Your teacher should find this brilliant!!
I love these two,,, characters,,,,Yes they are real people ,,,,But THEY are characters themselves !!! That is what they are >>A Real Life Comedy<<,,,I've read another one with these ladies and ,,,WoW they had a huge impact on me ,,,,Elaine,,,, I just love these stories with Virginia & Louise,,,,Sounds like the movie ,,,,Thelma & Louise,,,,, Elaine Keep up the Excellent work ,,,The Writings of Elaine P>>>Starring Virginia & Louise ,,,Two residents,,,,,,,,,,,,,Www@QuestionHome@Com

Louise and Virginia are very likable elders!. Part of me says please don't share any more of these pieces and make us care about these people!. (as ultimately losing them would sincerely hurt we readers)!.

On the other hand the conversations are complusive reading now and I can't wait for another 7 days to pass!. Thank you Elaine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love these snippets of real life!. I don't think I can capture what goes on in conversation though, since I suffer from verbal diarrhea (luckily for you you are all out of ear-shot) and I can be a bad listener sometimes!.!.!.in my own defence!.!.!.if some-one is desperate to tell me something, I can be a good listener then!.
Can I play Virginia, please!?
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I have missed these beautiful glimpses into the lives of Louise and Virginia!. Their own words paint them so vibrantly, and I thank you for sharing with us!. Yes, your playwriting teacher should love this!. It's exceptional!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love the girls,teacher should see also that there are great characters in this piece!.The sad truth is that we are all going to be there someday!.For some, like me, sooner than I want to think about!.Looking forward to the next episode!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Please don't tell Virginia there's no Santa Claus!
I love these ladies and you for bringing them alive for us!.
As far as that crazy guy who doesn't LOOK crazy!.!.!.!.
shh, that's all our secrets!.!.!.we can get away with our crazy cause we don't look it! Once we look it, we're toast!

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Yes, it is more than good enough!. It told a tale of a moment in time in a funny way!. I like the vernacular!. I love the summation!. Tres bon Elaine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The Girls are back! Your honesty about artists is commendable!.
Keep the dialogs coming!. I'd love to see a stage production, someday!Www@QuestionHome@Com

What!?!?!?
NOBODY turns down Bingo!!

True life ROCKS!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Another slice from the home delivered all so true!. It was amazing from visiting my Dad, how soon they would start lining up for meals!. The march of the wheelchairs!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I always enjoy these dialogues, but this one makes me feel sad!.
Sounds like Louise is losing some of her spunk!
Hope everything is alright!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know what your teacher will think of it, but I love it!. I eagerly await next Wednesday morning to get the next episode!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's a winner! Retirement homes are verily exactly like that!.!.!.my best friend is in one!.
You have dialogue as one of your talents, madam! Well spoken for all concerned!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was an awesome play and it was really interesting and I like Dondi am waiting for the next chapter!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It seems certain you must be a light in these gas life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

We read about ancient Roman coins today, and more from the quotation books!.Www@QuestionHome@Com