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Question: Poetry Challenge! I want you judge my poem and write a better one in response!!?
Don't just comment!. Write a poem response!. Either the revised edition of my poem or a new one!.

Two lines, three lines, 1 stanza, 10 stanza!.!.!.whatever! This is my challenge!

Heart
can you stop beating!?
It makes no sense to beat
when you're broken
when you're bruised
It makes no sense to pump
i need no color
rather be pale like a snow
I'm just so cold with sorrow!.

Heart
can you forgive me!?
I can't repair you back
It's our turn now to stop
when your owner leaves me
when your owner deserts me
It's our turn now to crumble
No point in standing
rather be laid down to rest
I'd much prefer death!.

Heart
I know I've been hard on you
I'm sorry for all things i put you through
Before you start to break on me
or ask for sympathy
i need to make you see:

love is a wonderful thing
But if you must know
it always carries the risk of hatred!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Okay Prince Dude, this is a little quip called "Fairy Tale 2000":
The precious little princess is out running with the dogs;
She's had her share of Princes, but she's still kissing frogs!.
The Queen sits at her mirror vainly staring at the reflection-
The King is on his cell phone making a connection!.
The palace is in shambles, the dungeons overfilled;
The rats!? They never hunger, feeding daily on fresh kill!.
They gather at the gallows, preparing for the feast-
They have the royal blessing for disposing of the meat!.
Off into the forest runs the Unicorn,
His spirit is the purest, for he was never born!.
The princess sees his shadow, lifts her head up slightly; nods!.!.!.
She's been out chasing dragons and no one seems to think it's odd!.
Prince charming brings her White Horse, then rides her 'til she drops
Her life was just a fairy tale- 'til someone called the cops!Www@QuestionHome@Com

great !Www@QuestionHome@Com