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Question: How can I improve my poem about Autumn!?
A Plea to Autumn
by Elaine Polin

Poets sing of Autumn
anticipating Winter,
of dying leaves
brilliant red and gold,
nesting squirrels,
creatures of the wild,
preparing dens against
ferocious winter,
while in my northern clime
Sol still burns with
Summer heat
and Ocean still
beckons me,
calling me into
his waters!. before
Mother’s snow and ice
lock him away from me!.

Oh, Autumn, stay
your chill winds
for yet another day!
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really loved this one a lot!. I don`t write poetry, but I do use my five
senses to read and enjoy them:!.

1!. I can HEAR the " Poets sing of Autumn"!.
2!. I can SEE the "Squirrels preparing dens"!.!.
3!. I can SMELL "Sol, Still burning with Summer heat"!.
4!. I can TOUCH "The Ocean as he beckons me"!.
5!. I can TASTE "Mother`s snow and ice"!.

Elaine, Have a special day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Au contrere, I LOVE imagery, and you have painted a picture in which I not only see what you are describing, I can feel it!.

But I also love autumn!. When I was in Michigan it was the last respite before nature unleashed her full fury on those creatures with noplace else to be!.

Autumn and Spring--transitional seasons!. In my life I am also in Autumn, and enjoying it--and delaying Winter as long as possible!.
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Elaine, you can't improve on this!. You can approach the subject from a different perspective, which would give a totally different poem!. You could move from the free verse to a more rigid form or rhyme, but each would be a different poem!. My own look at Autumn,(both seasonal and life-span) was this:

Autumn with you!.
(T!.C!.-LYMOBF)

Another year, another ring,
around our silver birch will bring!.
Another cascade of leaves to ground,
for sweeping and bagging and bending down!.
Another chance for frost or snow,
to clear the bugs, and so, help grow!.
Another phase, another face!.
A twilight in our favourite place!.
A joy for years, inwardly denied,
my room of choice, our room outside!.

As Autumn spreads it’s cloak of gold,
anticipate the new for old!.
Fear not the chill,
that Winter may bring,
for we cannot see every Spring!.
So on the here and now, we focus!.
Enjoy today,
live, love and pray,
for the bonus of sharing another Crocus!.
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How can you improve perfection!? This is filled with visual delights, scents of the ocean, the feel of the summer heat!. I see the brilliant red and gold, hear the delightful sounds as creatures prepare for "ferocious winter" -- I love the use of ferocious!.

It reminds me that I swam last night and it was wonderful!. Yes, Autumn, stay those chilly days and nights!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

When first I saw your poetry I did not feel the freshness which I feel here, now I can see another you (a path I have also taken)!. The words of the poem, rather than the form it takes, become the most important thing!.!.!.!.and this is the case here!. I hope you are finding this as exciting as I do!.!.!.!.you have inspired me!.!.!.!.I can feel an autumn poem bubbling up!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Why would you!?!?,,,Me believes that it iz poifek jest tha wey it iz,,,The morning chill,,,Ahhh jeeze that feels good
Frost on the car a nip in the in the air and Robert Frost on tha computer,,,By now the leaves are getting to be mostly brown,,,,,,Trick or Treat,,Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice reflection of trying to hang on to the warmth while knowing the coming days will bring the changes!. The only critique would be the word 'ferocious'!. I know the intent, the word just struck me odd, but as usual, that is probably just me!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Flowing free verse, descriptive, filled with images, and with yearning for longer, warmer days!. I wouldn't change anything!. We, here in the South would be happy to send you some more warm days! Is it November yet!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

At long last the chrysalis has burst that which held it bound!. Her butterfly wings are full of life and a field of words now offers itself for her perusal; ready to surrender the nectar of sweeter poems!.

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your poem is a masterpiece, it canot possibly be improved!. you are a master poet!. i would be very happy if i had 1/10 of your poem skills!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

September melancholy, letting go of summer ease, and Autum's gold
to face winter's chill once again, I've felt that since can't remember
when!. Kudos nice poem as is Elaine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I see no window of improvement!. It flows from thought to thought - description to description!. I love the last stanza's summation!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This one is beautiful!. My favorite part is the softness!.!.!.so much so that I wanted a soft rhyme at "!.!.!.nesting squirrels, creatures of the 'world'!.!.!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

I do not have the gift of writing, but I do dearly love to read poetry!.
This is a beautiful read, thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you are a talented super poet
i am glad i had the chance to read your poem
thank you
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cool! Just like autumn!. (Extra credits for not calling it Fall) Seasonally apropos!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

What can I say that hasn't been said already so eloquently and thoroughly!? It's beautiful, as is it's author!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You can't!!! Why try!? Not this one!!! Nope!!! Leave be!!!

Good Morning!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good poem!. It paints a magnificent picture of autumn in my mind!. Fantastic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's definitely ok

but i prefer poems which do not deal more on imagery!.!.

but please dont get me wrong, IT'S VERY GOOD!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its just wonderful pleasant read!
its simply natural! needs no additives!.Www@QuestionHome@Com