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Question: Your thoughts please!. Its kinda a Zen Christian ditty!?
Empty me Enter you

So how is it working out being me!?
And oh by the way, have I decided what exactly that entails!?
Years of delusion, Pride, Vanity and always guilty
These destructive friends have been the wind in my sails
While all along I have floated within your ocean of love!.

Silent and perfect has been your strength and patience
While I and my ego have believed in only one thing from the start
My ability to ever truly be separate from you, my creative essence
So is it true that you desire the love of my heart!?
This hearts so full of abandon and found broken and poor!?

Perhaps I am stronger than I think!.
Perhaps I am even afraid of my strength
And turn it against myself, thus making myself weak!.
Making myself secure!. Making myself guilty!.
Perhaps I am most afraid of the strength of God in me!.

But you know what it is to feel this way don’t you my Lord!?
You weren’t acting that night in the garden or day of the Cross
Your faith in your father as a perfect model for us, my Lord
I ask only that I may get it, apply it, and carry my own Cross
But I ask for your help in this fight between my ego and your light

So my dear Lord and brother how do I empty me and enter you!?
This discursive logic and desire to be seen by men as right
It tells me, there is no need to engage this fight from my pew
Surely, he will over look your ego and judge my heart a worthy plight
But your spirit tells me that I must empty me to enter you

Perhaps I am stronger than I think!.
Perhaps I am even afraid of my strength
And turn it against myself, thus making myself weak!.
Making myself secure!. Making myself guilty!.
Perhaps I am most afraid of the strength of God in me!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This was Beautiful! I am gonna save this!. This describes my reality right at the moment of 'figuring it out'!. The ego doesn't want to admit its afraid!. I seem to be drawing nearer and the ego's resistance becomes increasingly willful!. I really want God to take me!. I know that it will happen when He wills it!. I have to remember what it is I don't want!. This poem is a reminder that He sent me!. Thank you!.

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I think I can see where you are trying to go with htis but it is confusing!. It seemed like an introspective piece at first, examining the inner self and your relationship with your own thoughts!. It then abruptly appeared to become a prayer meeting style paean to Jesus/God/Bible etc!. I nearly stopped reading there but then it started to go into self dissection again!.

I think you need to clarify your intention, what you want the poem to say, and revisit this!. You have the writing ability, without a doubt!.
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