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Question: Any one care to offer comments for this bit of verse !?
Any suggestions or comments would be greatly appreciated!.

Yes, it is a sappy poem,,, I'm often a sappy guy,,, so I go with what I know best most often!.


Shades of golden brown, yellow tinged by red, orange flames,
aroma of apples cooking, cinnamon, final meal of the backyard grill!.
Heady fragrances wafting of sun warmed earth, frost seeking shadows,
comfortable flannel shirts, long warm sensuous kisses to chase chills!.

Breathe deep misty morning mountain air, rosy cheeks, reddening nose,
musical crisp fallen leaves swirling, dancing, rustling beneath feet!.
In the fields wet earthy smells abound, clinging tightly to all who pass,
thoughts of long warm snuggles, a frosty moon lit night beckons!.

Maple leaves lasting, clinging, still resisting against rattling winds,
bright harvest moon rising, seen through nearly naked trees, eerily!.
Over fields of pumpkins, geese chatting, honkin’ a farewell fly by,
cuddling in the after glow of love, gentle caresses, downy comforter!.

Rain devoid of pleasure, hints of snow to come, cascading down,
pungent wood smoke climbs from a valley, lingering in cold air!.
Flowers harvested before frost adorn a table, warm cider perfume,
hand in hand, exploring each other, love growing ever stronger!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You have picked an Autumn flower and vales!.!.!.put them on the page for us to delight with, and over!.!.!.what a marvelous eye you have! Seeing these things does not necessarily make you a poet!.!.!.but capturing them on paper, in beautiful form, does!.

Was my delight to answer your question!.!.!.!.three loves here, the love of Autumn's show, the love you cherish in kisses, and my love of reading this!. Compliments abound!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This poem is very beautiful, engaging the senses and the soul!. I felt completely enchanted as I read, compelling me to go back and read a second time!. I love both the words and the sentiment!. If it is sappy, then I love sappy!. Thank you!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very good! Your images are so real!. I especially commend your use of alliteration and consonance (Aroma-apples, wafting-warmed, air-rosy-reddening, leaves-lasting-clinging-still, and so on)!. Thank you for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You brought to the reader the pleasure of using all our senses!.This was a true delight!.Keep writing!.I will look forward to more of your
sensuous words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love this flowery poem with all the great description was very visual and paints such colorful picture!
Cheers!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Rather a nice comfy poem, and not too sappy!.

I like your use of extended phrases like
"Breathe deep misty morning mountain air"
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Nothing 'sappy' about loving the simple pleasures of life!. Well penned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Loved the imagery in this, such a richness great write Lib x xWww@QuestionHome@Com

Post more, this is good!. 4 poems here to me!.

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