Have I finally written a Sonnet (of sorts)?

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I have been trying to write a sonnet for awhile without much success!. I found this helpful beat from T!.D!. Euwaite to help me with meter!.
a CAN of PEAS for DINner PLEASE!. As I know it is not perfect, I will hope you find it fun!

A Sonnet for a Teacher
by C!.S!. Scotkin

A sonnet assigned, a teacher tonight
Her hopes are now dashed for no good meter
can come with day’s light and computer message
a dancer no rhythm or rhyme o’ertakes!.

“a CAN of PEAS for DINner, PLEASE, she reads
and weeps with sorrow great, to know all’s lost!.
But all is fair as words this pen may write
The pupil dreams iambic Eden’s day!.

If Avon’s Bard could do this meter well
Without a drop of sweat poetic shed
Not stain a fresh page with saltier tears
Then pupils must try to succeed, they will!.

And what of success at the end of day!?
A teacher who maybe for now will smile!.

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The sonnet is a difficult mastery, and the meter is the hard part!. Try this site as a meter reference!. I use it and it is helpful!.
http://www!.uncg!.edu/~htkirbys/meters!.htm
You did pretty good, all you need is a bit of polish to shine it up a bit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is how the meter read to me which may not be entirely correct but as I read!. 8 of the lines are iambic!. While not sure, I also thought sonnets employed end rhymes!?

Sonnet assigned for my teacher tonight!?
/-/-/-/--/
-//-/-//-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-//-/-//
/-/-/-/--/
-/-/-/-/-/
-/-/-/-/-/

These are challenging, but do force one to work structure into the words!. You are close!.
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I prefer not to be confined to certain rules, yet I know a sonnet calls for it!. I know not much of sonnets, yet it was enjoyable!. My preference is towards your other work!. I almost feel the constraint in it, but none the less it is a good piece!.

** I to was under the impression the last two lines were to rhymeWww@QuestionHome@Com

A sonnet about writing a sonnet, clever, clever girl!. This is funny and beautiful!.!.!.I can't do iambic pentameter!.!.!.actually anything that ends with "meter" I usually have trouble with!. Keep it going!.!.!.and then maybe rhyme will ensue!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very funny!. Repeat the "peas" a few more times!. The meter will flow naturally!. You have the form down perfectly, now beat that drum!
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The meter of a sonnet must ring pure
It is the very heartbeat of the form
The diction and the syntax must be sure
And with the meaning stray not from the norm!.
Alliteration is a real reward
When it is done with elegance and grace
And sings the song the poem is pointing toward --
It's then such niceties will find their place!.
And yet, I know a poem is so much more
It is a covenant with readers made
Who know what such fine-woven words are for
And all the toil by which they're underlaid!.
If I may say, I hope it is allowed,
Your teacher must this day be very proud!.

Ma'am, your sonnet is a good one, and that meter is so hard to learn!. I'm still trying to get it right!. Thank you for your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com