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TORN
I see the window to your soul
Reflected in your eyes
Hidden truths about your life
Dressed up in disguise,
Bitter tears are falling
Silent is your stare
Wondering what this life has given
Should you even dare!?
An unexpected encounter
Saw your heart land on a cloud
A name you can only whisper
Never to be said out loud,
Your shame is cradled by your anguish
It’s time to set it free
The three for whom your love remains
Are waiting patiently,
And in this temporary state
Of disbelief and confusion
Search you soul through your eyes
And turn from your illusion!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this is a very well thought out poem!. i really enjoy poems that rhyme, it just seems like they mean more to the poet when they take the time to make sure it all goes well together!. you are a truley talented writer!. little lines in the poem such as its time to set it free and saw your heart land on a cloud!. you are truley fantastic!. whatever you decide to do with this, i wish you well!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think this poem is really good !. it expresses ur thoughts and very nice really deep and just try more rythem I grade an a plus !. it makes me feel thet ur upset and that is perfect iget it thats how u feel and that is just what i put in my best poems that made everybody wow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow! awesome! very powerful indeed!.
this is great and beautifully well written!.
lovely, you sure have a knack at writing poetry!
post more!
cheers:]Www@QuestionHome@Com
very well done,,, easy to follow with no meaningless rhyming,,, compact, sincere, well thought out, flows very nicely,,, that is enough for me to have enjoyed reading this verse of yours!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like this!. Very expressive!.
This is a thought-provoking line: "Your shame is cradled by your anguish"Www@QuestionHome@Com
very good'''''''''''''''''''''''Www@QuestionHome@Com