Hi all,
I just wanted to have some honest feedback on this poem I did yesterday!. It's very gruesome, and creepy!. But, I'd like some honest feedback to anything you may have to say!. And I need to think of a better title, so any suggestions on that are welcome!.!.!.criticism is welcome as well, but if your just going to make fun of it keep it to yourself, thanks =)!.
Rot
Blood drips down as I stare out of the corner of my eye
You lay there suffering, withering, and wishing to die
It started with a mean insult, a way to poke fun
Did you honestly think you could have won!?
The torture you feel now is merely a taste
And soon, you will go to waste
Your body shall be smashed
And I will go on to have you lashed
Your soul will be shattered
Though apparently, it never really mattered
You whimper like a whiny fiend
Now, now, let us have you cleaned
A cut, a slice, and a slash,
As your blood trickles into a neat pile of gash
So long, and may you rot in hell
And with that, I shall send you my farewell
And there it is!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com