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Question: My poem - "Tears from Within"!?
Tryin to hide, it’s not working as planned
Seeing my life, finding it hard to stand
For I never thought I’d see the day
I let a guy do it that way
I felt the warmth, of his hand
Against my ribs, my neck, my hand
Feeling the breath ripped from inside
I had an attack, I couldn’t hide
I was shaking, couldn’t stay steady
What have I done, I wasn’t ready
Days went by, still seeing the guy
He kept coming back, when i'd said goodbye!.





I'm 15 and i wrote this about an awful experience that i had!.!.!.

Please be honest with your comments!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow this is really an awesome poem and it is from your heart and pain and you described it very vividly how it really broke your spirit!.Your a great poet and hope you;ll keep writing!.I am sorry to for the pain and sorrow this jerk put you thru!.!.!.Take care!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was absolutely incredible!. You write so magically, and I am so very sorry that you experienced what you wrote about!. You definitely captured me with your writing!. I thoroughly enjoyed that, it was so sadly beautiful!. Well done :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

You did nothing wrong! Remember that!. You had the right to say NO and expect it to be the end!.

Your poem is excellent!. You express what happened in words that make it clear without being explicit!.

You are a good writer!. Keep writing!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

fantastic!Www@QuestionHome@Com