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Question: Honest opinions about this poem!. !?

Let me know what you think, it seems a bit unfinished, what do you guys think!?


From the beginning of my days, I have been looking for your face; today, I have seen it!. I have seen the charm, the beauty, the unfathomable grace of the face for which I have yearned!. From beyond the stars and void of space, you came to me--transcendent, pure, of unimaginable beauty, bringing with you the essence of love!.


I am bewildered by the magnificence of your beauty, and wish to see you with a hundred eyes!. My heart has burned with passion and has searched forever for this wondrous beauty that I now behold!. I am ashamed to call this love human, and afraid to call it divine!. Your fragrant breath, like the morning breeze, has breathed new life into me!. My soul is screaming in ecstasy!. Every fiber of my being is in love with you!.

Your effulgence has lit a fire in my heart; you have made the Earth and sky radiant for me!. You are the master alchemist!. You light the fire of love in heart and soul of every being!. You transform all who are touched by you!. Mundane concerns, troubles and sorrows dissolve in your presence!. You bewilder me with your grace--all evils transform into goodness by you!. Through your loving
existence, all opposites unite!. Through you, I have been able to touch Heaven!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I see that this poem develops a chemistry between the reader and author!. As I was reading it, I got an interesting reaction!. The more I read, the more I wanted to know more!. As I read on, the closer I felt to this poem!. Then, finally I felt like I have arrived in heaven!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, like other answers have said, it's very visual, brings up images in your mind!.

However, to me, it reads more like a very very short novel, it doesn't have the same format and style as traditional poems do!. You could maybe rearrange the way the reader reads it, maybe a line break here and there - it's up to you, either way, it's some great writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'd call it prose, and see the care for you!. Take it and embrace it!. It is incomplete until you are in it!. I wrote similar things when I was discovering God's presence in my life!. It gets pretty deep!. But there is one thing to life that is great, "It is better to be looking down at the daisies that up at the roots!" !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

A very visual poem! I personally enjoyed it, but as always you will be criticized by those whos minds cannot grasp the concept of your poem!. Poems such as this should not only be read but visualized, and sadly people do not have the patience anymore, not like us visualists!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Simply beautiful!.!.!. Whoever recieves that poem will be a very very lucky guy/girl I know I would be :) If that poem is for someone that is :)

Simply flawless and so so romantic!. You have a talent take care of it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Here original ideas are offered in this poem with intense inner love!.
Poet/poetess sees all around the world with this passion!.
Actually it is very great poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I!.Love!.It :)Www@QuestionHome@Com