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My dear love here is a letter
Of the past that never was
My dear friend he is a tear
On my palm like a pupil
In this life I was not the one
For you, unfortunately to anyone
I was always the un seen
And who am I to be loved
The father is crazy the house is broken
The windows are shattered and the heart is taken
And me wishing the life would turn
To the pinky world of wonderland
Come on
You cant be the one
My dear lover
Here is a letter
To tell you that I was the one
And if I wasent the one
Then I m not the one for anyone
Cooking ,and cleaning doing my best
Working as slave as a maid
That never rest
Taking shower and smell clean
Shaking with tiredness
And say im fine
Here my love my last thing
After that I will leave the earth
In the desserts you will see my feet prints
And as you pass the seas you will drink my tears
Don’t be angry or sad my dear friend
i m still in the dark reading a book
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My dear love, here is a letter
Of the past that never was!.
My dear friend, here is a tear
On my palm, like a pupil!.
In this life I was not the one
For you!. Unfortunately to anyone
I was always the Unseen
And who am I to be loved!?
The father is crazy, the house is broken,
The windows are shattered and the heart is taken,
And I am one who wishes that life would turn
Into the pink world of a wonderland!.
Come on!
You can't be the one!
My dear lover,
Here is a letter,
To tell you that I was the one;
And that if I wasn't the one -
Then I'm not the one for anyone!.
Cooking and cleaning, doing my best!.
Working as a slave, as a maid
Who can never rest!.
Taking a shower and smelling clean;
Shaking with tiredness,
But saying "I'm fine"!.
Here my love, my last thing!.
After that I will leave the earth!.
In the deserts you will see my foot prints;
And as you cross the seas you will feel my tears!.
Don't be angry or sad my dear friend:
I'm still, and in the dark!. Read me like a book!.
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Beautiful piece!.!.Do u study literature poetry!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Still in the dark are you babe here's a candle!.Www@QuestionHome@Com