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How Sweet The Broom
How sweet the Broom brightens the moor
A worthy rival to Buttercups summer yellow!.
And Brambles tangle, a curse to the fellow
Dwelling at his cottage thatched with straw!.
Spring is here, and green is the new pasture
Plowed and sown by his own gnarled hand!.
As spires of life sprout from the brown land
And all living things obey the call of nature!.
Hairy Willow Herb and Purple Loosestrife,
Meadow Cranes-bill, Creeping Plume Thistle
Sway in harmony to the cottager’s merry whistle
As moor and brown land burst forth with life!.
Above the Bracken a church clock speaks the hour,
And soft breezes dance with all growing things!.
The Moorcock springs on blurred whirring wings
While the Bee’s take but harm no willing flower!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The spirit of beauty, ne’er waning with time
Made iridescent by unmoving time
It has no tone, nor colour or hue
It is pure spirit of beauty shining eternally true !.!.!.
The unending summer, and the melting wines
Of a life well spent in travels or chains
Bound as the sun arising to set
Of a love long forgotten as yet unmet!.
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A gentle bucolic muse, well penned!. I could almost hear the 'go-back go-back, calls as the grouse lift off in their characteristic explosion of wings and whirring!.
Tiny typo; the apostrophe on bees isn't required!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Rhyming quatrains filled with imagery in motion!. The final personification of the flower as "willing" is perfect poetic expression!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is so lovely! A singing botany lesson, I am totally unfamiliar with most of these plants but I love the name Purple Loosestrife, I hope it is as beautiful as it's name!. A wonderful poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your knowledge of botany plays well with traditional English verse to give a quaint picture of the Midlands in late spring,Www@QuestionHome@Com
The last verse too is my favourite!. It has a flow of words quite musical and few words say a lot!. First two verses are rather stilted and tight!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Just one word - Evocative
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dang!. how do you guys write that!? i write too but i don't know how to word them like yours!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's nice!. The last verse is my favourite!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Robert, it is far more than satisfactory; you have filled my mind's eye with a cornucopia of Nature's abundance, variety, and beauty!. I live in a rural area in upstate New York and this reminds me so much of what I see when I hike!. You have a sense of the immanent in Nature that is palpable in your poetry!. Each wildflower, each living thing, is for you a theophany, an archetype, and this would be obvious even if you did not set them off in majuscule -- Broom, Purple Loosestrife, et al!. -- because you see them through loving and appreciative eyes, indeed let us see them through your eyes!. You lend to what you write a majesty reminding me of Gerard Manley Hopkins's "Pied Beauty!." Your penultimate line - "The Moorcock springs on blurred whirring wings" -- masterfully combines internal rhymes, consonance, and alliteration, a panoply of easy ornaments that is dazzling to me!. Wonderful work Robert!.Www@QuestionHome@Com