Critique my New Poem ... When I Am Gone?

Question: Critique my New Poem !.!.!. When I Am Gone!?

Critique My New Poem: "When I Am Gone !.!.!."!?
When I am gone away
No body will cry
No one will shed tears
My cold body
Will be for nature to reclaim
The sun will rise next day
As it did for million years
The clouds will fill the skies
The rain will fall and
Moisten my grave
Our lives are small waves
That hit the ocean shores
And soon disappear
So when I go away
No body
Should cry
No body
Should shed tears
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This is so moving!. I absolutely feel it!.
You are not going any where any time soon though!.
Lets go streaking instead
wooo hooooo
When I die people should have one big Orgy!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Why have you posted this twice under two different Avatars!? Or has some-one stolen your poem and reposted it!?

No body means - you don't have a body!.!.!.it should be nobody!.

I think this would be more dramatic if you actually say
When I am dead, to use a euphemism lessens the impact of your message!.
Yes, this is a nice little poem with something to say!. I agree we are as nothing in the huge scheme of things!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The whole poem is about death
or dying because of the title!. When I' am gone
and the dealing of at a funeral!.
In memoriam verse
The tears would act as a rainfall
or cloud of tears!.
It talks about the different weather
From rain to sun
Clouds fill the sky
and then the rain

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This is very nice and I really like it --Grannyji has already told you about the word no body , so will not elaborate on it! This is good! Cheers!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's really good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com