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Question: How to fix my poem!?!?!?
what can i do to fix this

Lost unseen unknown
And i havnt got a hope
I have no clue where to go
Maybe I should shout
I think its time to stand out

Many years alone
without a soul to a bone
No one to stand by my side
No one to help me hide

I thing i should break free
i think its time to be me
or maybe i should keep the key
So that no one can see

i think ill stay hidden
And forever ill be forbidden

any ideas how to make this better!?!?!?!?!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
No ideas but it does need some work!. Dropped in to say Amanda is a nice name!. Good luck with the poem!.

Ok!.!.ok!.!.!.!.!.stop hitting me!.!.!.here's (only) a suggestion which may help you or not!.


Lost unseen unknown
No hope nor clue
Where to go I shout
To make me stand out!?

Years spent alone
Without soul nor hope
No-one by my side
To help me to hide

I have to break out
I just want to live
Should I just keep the key
So that no one can see

No, let me stay hidden
Forever forbiddenWww@QuestionHome@Com

First, spelling things correctly helps!. Second, you have a couple lines that don't rhyme, but the rest do; be consistent!. If you're going to rhyme, make it fit better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com