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Question: Could you rate my poem!? Suggest a title!?
wrote it last year! i like music with english lyrics so that's the language i wrote this and others that i've composed!.!.!. please don't be very strict with me, my poem or any mistakes about the language, it's not my native!!.!.!. thanks!

Near the port, by the sea
there's an angel who can play
the guitar and it seems
he can sit there all day

He can play but can't sing,
he can't sing but can pray
and his prayers are songs
reaching out for a God

and the fishermen' sons
gather around this man
and then girls are coming near
looking for a chance to dance
but now the songs that they hear
are so sad, are so blue
and their feelings cause tears
falling under the moon

and this sadness around
brings back bad memories
but he doesn't want to let them down,
he has to play one of those happy themes

He can play but can't sing
he can't sing but can pray
and his prayers are sounds
flying over the clouds

And now the boys want to dance
and the girls are taking their hands
And a joyful madness
is coming after the sadness
as they spin
as they turn
as they fall
as they burn
full of confusing feelings
with so various meanings

And they dance and they laugh
while the angel cries
tears of pain or of love -who knows!?-
still there, he tries
to touch the strings of the guitar
and make the melody start
but the guitar silently dies!.!.!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a great lyric - Joni Mitchell could have written it and that's saying something!
It needs a fine Soprano voice and a quick bouncy rhythm like "big yellow taxi" until the last line!.
You could call it "Fallen Angel"Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautiful poem

THE GUITAR
TOUCH THE STRINGS
FLY OVER THE CLOUDS
LOOKING FOR A CHANCE TO DANCE
(metaphorically, aren't they all looking for a chance to dance!?)Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's a very sad song!. Perhaps you could call it 'the melody of dying'!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty good!.
Instead of "so various meanings" try "full of various meanings!."
I can't think of a good title!.
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I loved it really! :D

I require "THE SOUND OF GUITAR'S MELODY"Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this poem !. Prayer waves dance away the pain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Looks and sounds professional!.

Lol are you thinking!.!.!.!. Let me put my poems in you! Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW, the fact that English is your second language I think the poem is brilliant - it has a lot of movement and the 'tempo' seems to speed up as it is read!. It is quite moving and I'm no English Literature graduate but I know I like it!

(PS - It reminds me a little of some Crowded House (Aussie Band) lyrics in a way and their frontman Neil Finn is one of the world's great songwriters-- also a combined Crowded House/Dixie Chicks song called "Silent House" something about the emotions in your poem seem similar!?)

A think a great title would be: "Burning Silence"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice poem - it lost it's rhythm a little in the middle!. I like the fact that it tells a story!.!.!.!.it did lack a little bit of passion perhaps!.!.!.you seem to be telling the story of an angel, but focus more on the dance!.!.!.!.!.it would be interesting to counter-point this with the Angel's feelings (throughout the poem - not just at the end)!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.perhaps just use the title "Angel tears"!?Www@QuestionHome@Com