Does this ocean Trigee match the theme of the day?

Question: Does this ocean Trigee match the theme of the day!?

(Forgive me for trying this again!.
It is my Achilles Heel)

To Ocean (A Trigee)
by Elaine Polin

Take me ……………!.!.never leave me
into your waters………here let me stay
hold me………………when my time comes
within your waves…!.!.!.!.I will float forever
let me,………………!.never part from you
sail upon you…………and live in you
may you……………!.!.eternally holding
be my grave…………!.until Time ends!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I have accepted and retained all three ideas as projected within this Trigee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is a very deep and intimate love you are expressing here; not the teenage type, but the married couple whose love was always prevailing through the good and hard times!. Very touching words!. It is nice to be a perfectionist, and that is many people's Achilles Heel!. I think that you have a lot to say, with a special touch of femininity!. So , just spell it out of your imagery and let it flow!. I think you should write more often!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have not read the others as of yet!. Your Trigee is poignant!. It is soothing and reassuring!. I see and feel the inviting, calming waters!. Well done Elaine!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like this!. Change a couple of words and this could also be a love poem as well!.

Edit: Yes it is, to the ocean!. My point is that it could also be one for a person as well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

After reading this Trigee a few times,I really know why I'm writing so much!. It is a beautiful poem, and inspirational!. Thank you Elaine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Take me to the Water!. It could be a baptismal poem as well!. A real love poem!. Thank you, I'm beginning to like this form and understand it better!.

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And why do you say these are difficult for you!?
I think it's great!. All 3 parts stand easily alone, the 3rd being most powerful!.
Nice peaceful reading this morning!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it!. You, Dondi, and hydropro have the same Achilles heel!. GM and thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is very romantic, Elaine! Love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If Achilles had such a heel he'd still be around!
This is very flowing, a real prayer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think the oceans Atlantis
would swap your loyal decks
in hearing this!.
a lovely Trig from your lazarette!.
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Lovely!.!.!.in that Viking Funeral way!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com