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Question: Can you rate this poem!? Im 14!?
I kinda wrote this for the girl I liked and she loved it so much she put it on her myspace :-D Its based on things that happend in my life thus far
Ever since I was young,
The words of People have always stung,
Every word is a lie,
Tears down my face I began to cry,
So I would sit there and wait,
They filled my mind with words of hate,
My life disfigured horribly
My mind filled with insecruity
I let them get to me,!.!.!.
For it was the truth I couldn't see,!.!.!.
And they we're just joking,!.!.!.
but they had already broke my wings,!.!.!.
But then I met you,
And my happiness began anew,
For your words were truth,
And thats all I needed as proof,
For you honestly cared,
You showed compassion, while others stared
Then I told your secret
But it became an everlasting regret
I let them get to me,!.!.!.
For it was the truth I couldn't see,!.!.!.
And they we're just joking,!.!.!.
but they had already broke my wings,!.!.!.
Thankfully you forgave,
the likes of me, a lowly knave,
My Insecruities came back,
And my happiness began to lack
Didn't want to lose a friend,
I didn't want another friendship to end,
So I thought it was wise,
For evey awkward moment I'd apologize,
I let them get to me,!.!.!.
For it was the truth I couldn't see,!.!.!.
And they we're just joking,!.!.!.
but they had already broke my wings,!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Joel,
A poem this beautiful can be on a site
It talks about when you were young
having memories!.
Whether they were lies or not
This is before you met her
It talks about friendship
It talks about your life after
meeting this girl it was like new
This poem is about sharing
your feelings with her
along with caring
With the two of you sharing secrets
being careful not to have regrets!.
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Broken wings!.!.
Inability to fly are a bad thing!.!.Your wings will mend in in the end you will be a better person for realizing what transpired and changing the pattern that led up to it!.!.
You cannot always get back the things you break
Never stop trying, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow, you wrote that!? 14 yrs!? Your awesome! I loved it because it started out sad and lies!.!.!. and it began a fresh new start- and he felt happy again!. This is such a cool poem!. Maybe you'll be a writer one day!? Do you wish to be a writer!?
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this is absolutely spectactular
i love it
you could make this into a lil song too and just that great
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That poem is amazing!! I'd definitely rate it a 10 easily!! Great job for only being 14!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow that was heartfeltWww@QuestionHome@Com
It was good, but I would hve guessed it was a poem written by a young man to his love interest!. The repetition of the line "but they had alrasy broken my wings" was good!. I would suggest getting her flowers instead though buddy :) If the relationship goes sour, then at least she can't tell everyone that your poem was lame or anything like that!. Yes, flowers will do and make her feel even more special!. Www@QuestionHome@Com