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Drowning

I am drowning in a sea of emotion

You see me & turn away

Why won't you grab my hand & save me

I thought you said you would protect me

Where's the love you used to have

You walk away as if you dont care

My thoughts have over taken me

I am lying there helpless

Oh where is my prince who knew my emotions

Before I showed them

Will he turn around & reach in

If he does will he save me in time

Please someone anyone give me a hand

Save me from this sea before it devours my soul

~BY DMU!
Thanks just something I wrote when I was really depressed!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really liked your poem!.!. you express your feelings and emotions very well!.!.!. keep on writing! Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah i guess its ok but you should add more emotion to a few words instead of just dragging out every last word you can add metaphors and compare!. Relatively I could have wrote something like that with about 8 lines to do it!. I like the style very good!. Your probably going to hate this though!.!.!. it sounds like a princess in distress!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Depression in all her glory rears her head in your words!.!.
The masses eat it up as they also have been wallowing in this depressive state!.

Things will get better!.!.!. cheer up!
You will write poetry well one day, I am sure of it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it its really good i like it because it must really tell about you and that's like me because i like to spread my feelings to the world 2Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poetry is your self expression of your inner thoughts and a great form of therapy while your depressed!. We best express ourselves when we are emotionally vulnerable!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've been drowning in that sea for too long to even bother taking notice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i don't believe in judging people for writing what they feel, I think emotion is a beautiful thingWww@QuestionHome@Com