Can you tell what you think?

Question: Can you tell what you think!?

about these poems i wrote

http://www!.quizilla!.com/poems/7860939/ju!.!.!.

http://www!.quizilla!.com/poems/7861306/ju!.!.!.

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b-e-a-uuuuuutiful!. keep it up!. I know this is weird but keep the pain you feel with you to stay inspired!. and go deeper into your pain!. take out the blue part!. and you've got skillzWww@QuestionHome@Com

At first I liked the first one better, but now I like the second one better, it's deeper!. Try to take out unnecessary words, then you'll have gold!. It's a very touching poem, especially the last five lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love them!
The first is my favorite and my favorite part is

"just remember you will always be in my heart
even if you depart"

i love them they're beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

They're great!
You've got talent pepsi man
I agree I like the first one better I don't know why though cause they're both brilliant =] xoxoxoxoxoWww@QuestionHome@Com

The first one I really like!. The second one was ok too but not as good as the first one!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow pepsi man!.!.!.their really good!. You got talent!. Come back to the WS soon :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it !. Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like, i like! somehow i like the first version better though ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

very great i love both good job! i starredWww@QuestionHome@Com