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Question: My poem about any girls comments please!?
Time stands still

Devilishly deep eyes time stands still,
For a fool cannot find the will,
Stagger an eye for you the path he tread,
Left lingers the words you had said,
They look beyond the eyes you lure,
To fall and dive devilishly more,
There paused in time as both eyes lock,
As if her eyes could stop the clock!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Gosh that is beautiful, you've managed to articulate whilst retaining a constructing a scene within the mind !.!.

It is that in order to rhyme or maintain poetic structure we lose the gyst or deeper meaning we seek to portray with the weaving of words!.!. excellent !.!.!.

Entranced I stand, bewitched by his passing
Eyes as deep as the barrels spirit laden with intoxication
Passes by in swoon enraptures with his fiery wings
In fiery throng moving the very earth beneath my feet
Unseen he smokes a signal blurring the heavens
For it is Eden indeed on earth and gasping
As a fish abandoned for water from a running stream
A moment held in eternity and he passes by
I remain forlorn!. Love lost and alone I remain
For him to pass by again, no meaning other does life hold
That gain he comes if only a moment to pass by !.!.!.!.!.

Be Inspired !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's really good, it sounds like a professional wrote it!. :) I love your use of language it really makes a strong image, you're very talented!.

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Could you tell me what you think of mine!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

yer poem is a bit disturbing, yet so!.!.!. enticing!. i like it!. great work!. bravo!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com