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Question: Feedback For My Poem!. I Am Thirteen!.!?
First off, I "feel" the emotion in my poem, but I do not express it how the poem is worded!. (I do not cut!.) But this poem still is meaningful to me!. Please give me constructive feedback!.

A cut for the time you kissed me,
A cut for the time I cried!.
A cut for the time I loved you,
And two for the time you lied!.
Four more for the times I've suffered,
Thanks to your careless mind!.
I should not have turned to this,
Because of a silly boy!.
Yet even though I shouldn't,
Your love is impossible to avoid!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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Super cliche!.Www@QuestionHome@Com