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pls give me some good advice on how to make it better etc etc

I am lonely, like a tree
It's a sad irrationality
My tears fall to the ground
unnoticed but always found

to children, a play thing
found where the brids sing
as time goes by, i grow old
lonely in a field, tall and bold

slowly the gentle wind blows
and suddenly a seed flows
through the air, to the ground
it grows without a sound

gracefully the seasons pass
and so grows the grass
as well as the tree
now bold and tall, just like me

suddenly I now see
the beautiful thing beside me
from the same pattern my life's unglued
and love for me has been renewed
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