Position:Home>Poetry> Is my first poem good? give me some thoughts?

Here I sit
and still I see that vision in my mind
these thoughts i think
the sights I see
all bundled and broken hearted

my heart is remembering
what my eyes couldn't believe
this Angel
from across the sea
the beauty I perceived

yet here im sitting
and wondering what I would say
if I could speak
if she could hear
The words I would convey

im tired of sitting
I may be quitting ,
I think im giving in
too hard it is
to show what I
am feeling from withinWww@QuestionHome@Com

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