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Question: A summer poem, your comments please!?
Summer Storm

The gray sky darkens
Silver leaves upturning
Crashing, pounding, now resounding
Flashing, singeing, nature cringing
Torrential floods begin
Thirsty earth drinks in moisture
Harder still the rain it lashes
Suddenly the lightning flashes
And a large limb breaks and crashes
Dying as the storm now gone!.

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I think it's great!. Your great use of rhythm, and rhyme were all a true joy to read!. I also really enjoyed how the meter would change from a slow to quick pace as you read it!. Excellent write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I expected lazy bucolic images (missed the title) and found the energetic storm fantastically real!.

Here there is a green carpet and pale blue sky with a streak or two of thin clouds!. A gentle breeze, songbirds and trees that talk in turn according to the breeze, but only politely!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I loved it! Taking us there as storm approaches, then its crescendo, till it's finally gone (with word "dying" limb reinforcing its finality)!.
Really enjoyed it!.

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I think it's wonderful, you created a great visual, while i was reading, i witnessed everything!. That's talent!.
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I read few poems that conveyed the power of a storm as well as this!
I really appreciate the descriptiveness!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I know a place where such a storm
washed wind and waves and water

Yours is a beautiful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

good good!.
many descriptive words, ryhming but making sense, that's gooood!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is not a jab, but I could imagine Willy Wonka reading this!.

I enjoyed it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

luv it!. it actually remind me of a summer storm this is a great poem Www@QuestionHome@Com