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The Hall of Injustice

The hall: dark, long
Walls of Tuscany gold
February like clouds lift
As if !. !. !. Sun shines
Beckoning on words

Forward always too
Rodin carved doors
Demanding authority
Pity !. !. !. battle ram
Needless—unlatched

Gait steady, stride
Gate opened wide
Reservations made
Preyed !. !. !. I should’ve
Baptismal disappointment

Obsidian orbs
Indiscriminately capturing
Light eternally held
Fell !. !. !. unmentionable depths
Arson, murder, theft

A chair, a throne
Mine to have
Minds to own
Else led to the hall
Dark and long


I apologize that this isn't a happy, warm hearted poem!. All it's trying to say is: A life lived unjust leads to another life unjust, and another, and another, etc!.
Please let me know if this "style" works, or if I should lengthen it with more details!.
This is a rough draft (basically a free write to get started on something) and I have the skin of a rhino so don't worry about hurting my feelings!.






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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Warm and fuzzy is not always needed,,, in fact without a reality check and balance neither the warm nor it's flip side of cold truth works worth a hoot!.

Without the explanation what I thought it was about was someone facing death by the state,,, stanza 1 & 2 seemed to be about a trial,,, then 3, 4, & 5 about the walk to the death room and dying!.

Maybe I have read it all wrong,,, even re-reading it I cannot shake my initial impression!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is filled with good ideas; strong images with interesting word usages!. I don't know if the poetry is complete!. The punctuation is a little abrupt at times!. The ellipse and dash should have very strong transitions for them to indicate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hide like a rhino, eh!? Oh, that is so tempting!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

Nah!

Not a bad first draft!. Needs a bit of spit and polish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com