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Question: Is this a Dondiesque ballad/pome!?
I have wanted to write a Dondiesque
Ballad for a long time!. Do you think
he could sing this one!?
What is Old Age!?
by Elaine Polin
Come, with me into Forever
where we first emerged
expelled as part of space and time,
in a cosmic surge!.
Our years number in their billions,
stardust years have passed,
evolving slowly into life
since Day One’s great blast!.
Time’s slow passage makes us recent
in ancient, newborn, flow,
eons of expansion passing
as we learn and grow!.
I have lived for only decades
the Universe my seed,
we will live in timeless splendor
stardust Thinking Reed!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
If you have the music to "I've been working on the Railroad", sing this ballad to that tune!. It fits pretty well, and sounds pretty good!.
Dondi gives you an A for your ballad, and a star for your collection and a kiss just cause he wants to!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Elaine P,
POME!? Any words brought together within the magnitude of this message should always be a song of Joy to sing!. I hope Dondie's voice is up to the task!.!.!.
DAWN OF A NEW AGE
Come With Me Forever
Where We First Emerged
Space And Time And Weather
Floating In A Cosmic Surge
Years Number In The Billions
Stardust And Debris Has Passed
A Utopia Rising With Two Suns
Since Day One Has Been Casted
CHORUS
Dawn Of A New Age
Constellation Stage
Planet's Will Align
For A Universal Mind
Passages Of Time
Have Been Descending
Birth Of All Mankind
Is It Never Ending!?
Through It All Love
RELEASE
Even Though I Have Lived For Only Decades
Within Her Womb I Was A Seed
We Can Live On Edges Of Splendor
Zodiac Signs Of Astrology
GUITAR SOLO
CROWD CHANT
We Are Part Of The Universe
We Are Bound Every One Of Us
We Are Part Of The Universe
We Are Bound Every One Of Us
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I think this is a lovely poem with a lovely theme, but the rhythm isn't as bouncy as a Dondi (in my opinion)!. I'd have to scan this with other Dondi's to be sure but I'm going to go with my gut and say this has more trochees than a Dondi!. At least the stanzas start off trochaic!.
Doesn't "Dondi" sound like a good name for a poetry style--right up there with Trigee!? Anyway, I'm not trying to be mean, just honest--even if I am completely wrong (which that is a good possiblity)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
When he sings it, please send me a recording, for I would love to hear it!.!.!.!.it already sang whilst reading it, but to hear Dondi perform this, icing on the cake!
Lovely, you know how I love the theme of connectedness in the cosmos, was truly music to my heart!.
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A beautiful ballad, and I almost missed it!.!.!.Y/A is sluggish tonight!.
I really think the third stanza is stunning!. Thanks!. Now to get Dondi to write a tune!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Do I have permission to cry once more!?
It's been a RIDICULOUSLY emotional day, but all is being put into perspective!.
Thank you, Elaine
"Come with me into forever!." I LOVE that!
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I can just hear this!. Lovely song!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
II think you succeeded!. It sounds close enough!. I've tried to answer your questions!. No luck!. Wondering if this one will post!.Www@QuestionHome@Com