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Question: A new poem of mine, Seasons!. Feedback!?
Burning fierce, alive, entrancing,
leaping embers ever dancing
with the energy I seek;
alone, the winter is long and bleak-
I'll not survive without you!.
Something peaceful, cool, refreshing,
from above, a gracious blessing
that I would stay afloat;
alone, the summer scorched my throat-
I'll not survive without you!.
Through the skies, erratic flying,
remind me that not all is dying
and I am not alone
when autumn chills me to the bone;
I'll not survive without you!.
Flowers bloom and life is thriving,
hatred dies and love reviving;
my very soul is free!
When I'm in doubt, the spring reminds me
I'll not survive without you!.
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Dr Seuss would be proud!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have no intention on insulting your poetry
I like how each part is written out!.
For example the winter
it would talk about warmth by burning
winters are long
Summer is the opposite
it is very hot out
so on has to replace their fluids
the thought of drinking lemonade
it an idea
The autumn the leaves start to change colors
this beauty is of red brown yellow leaves
as they fall to the ground!.
The weather starts to be come cold
because days are shorter
Spring is the melting of snow
preparing for the work in the garden
thoughts of planting flowers and
vegetables
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Yes!!!!! I love, love, love, love, love this poem! Great balance, great ending, good rythm!. Very fun to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its good!Www@QuestionHome@Com